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Tip #9: Favor verbs over nouns

2/27/2014

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Nominalization may sound like a fancy word, but what it describes is quite basic.  It means to form a noun from a different part of speech.  And it also means inducing weakness when used in writing because it usually makes sentences longer and more confusing.  Still, the practice dominates many types of writing in the professional world, including engineering circles.

To strengthen writing which uses nominalization, writers should choose verbs when possible.  Nouns are convey a static nature since they represent persons, places, and things.  Verbs, on the other hand, convey a dynamic nature since they represent action.  Favoring verbs over nouns also tends to shorten sentences and otherwise tighten prose, making writing stronger.

Take the example in the cropped image shown above.  Applicability (used in the part indicated with the red underline) is a great example of nominalization.  Applicability is a noun made from the verb to apply.  Using nominalization in writing often requires the use of prepositional phrases, and this example is no exception.  Nominalization is not difficult to spot, but like we have and will see in other weekly tips, the writer has multiple options to improve the writing.

Option #1: Eliminate the prepositional phrase by changing applicability

Instead of using the wordy construction shown, the writer can provide some conciseness by eliminating the prepositional phrase.  This requires changing the word modified by the prepositional phrase, in this case, applicability.  The easiest way to do this is to change the word into a related form.

Applying traditional methods to document engineering projects was never seriously questioned . . . .

This one change makes a very noticeable improvement.  But there are other options the writer can consider.

Option #2: Eliminate the prepositional phrase by deleting applicability

Instead of replacing applicability the writer can simply delete it along with the preposition of.  For example,

Using traditional methods to document engineering projects was never seriously questioned . . . .

Again, this change improves the sentence, although the meaning communicated is slightly altered.

My recommendation: Eliminate the passive voice as well as the nominalization

In the vast majority of writing for engineering and scientific audiences, the passive voice reigns supreme.  Its widespread use stems from the belief that taking the actors out of the action communicates more objectivity.  It also makes the writing more wordy and decreases reader comprehension, both of which open the door for practices like nominalization.

Thus, better writing will communicate the same meaning with fewer words.  That means eliminating both the passive voice (use of to be verbs) and the nominalization.  To eliminate the passive voice, make the actor(s) the  subject of the sentence.  In the case of our example, the actors are management.  Thus we have

Management never seriously questioned . . .

Next, eliminate the nominalization by replacing most of the phrase underlined in red with a select adjective:

. . . their methods to document . . .

Finally, put the pieces together.

Management never seriously questioned their methods to document engineering projects until after the merger.

Eliminating and avoiding wordy practices like nominalization make writing stronger and more interesting to read.  Few engineers actually do this in their writing, so mastering this concept can make your writing really stand out!
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Tip #8: . . . Then there is than

2/20/2014

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The borrowed nature of the English language is both a blessing and a curse.  Because it absorbs selections of the languages of the cultures encountered by English-speaking people as they traveled the world, the English language has a rich diversity.  But this feature also means that the same or similar sounds can indicate very different words.  The same aspect holds true with words with close spellings but completely different meanings.

Add to these features careless or ignorant writers who confuse spoken English with written English and you have a combination that could spell confusion for readers.

Take the words than and then, for instance.  Both of these words appear in the example in the cropped image above.  While their spelling and pronunciation is very similar, their meanings (and hence their proper uses) are quite different.

Than is an conjunction used in making comparisons (note the red underline in the cropped image).  Its proper use requires two elements to appear with it, one in each side.  In the example above, those two elements are the aluminum alloy 7075-T6 and 316 stainless steel.  Tensile strength is the basis of the comparison.

Then is an adverb indicating sequence (note the blue underline in the cropped image).  Its proper use also requires two elements, but unlike than those two elements need not be in the same phrase or even the same sentence.  But they should be in the same vicinity to avoid confusion.  In the example above, the two elements are what appear in sequence, namely the actions the  engineer should take.  First, the engineer decides what characteristics to include in the analysis.  Second, the engineer creates a comparison matrix.  Thus, the engineer does A, then the engineer does B.

In my experience, confusion on this point is not very common.  But it is significant enough to comprise the subject of one of my weekly tips. 
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Tip #7: Recognize when serial commas are optional

2/13/2014

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Commas are perhaps both the most widely used punctuation mark and the most incorrectly used punctuation mark.  That makes commas an obvious object of my weekly tips.

Here's one regarding serial commas, also known as listing commas since they are used when listing separate elements.  The accepted convention has traditionally been to use the comma to separate each element of the list or series, including the final one indicated by the conjunction and.  That convention, however, is changing.

Consider the example shown in the cropped image above.  The predicate contains a list of three items.  In the example shown above, a comma does not appear before the final coordinating conjunction (indicated with the red underline).

This usage is not incorrect.  It represents the changing convention with the changing times.  Thus the comma in this place is optional.

The previous comma, however, is not optional.  A comma between reaction and fewer is essential to indicate that the items are in series or part of a list.

My recommendation

Call me old school, but I prefer the traditional convention.  The comma will then indicate the division between each element in the series and prevent confusion, especially if one of those elements has two or more sub-elements.  Thus, I recommend rewriting the sentence in this way:


Clean air intake provides a cleaner reaction, fewer emissions, and lower maintenance costs.

Again, this is entirely optional.  The use of the final comma in a list is stylistic choice for the writer.  Personally, I prefer to eliminate confusion, which is why I recommend sticking to the traditional convention.
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Tip #6: Use capitalization to indicate the specific & not the general

2/6/2014

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Capitalization errors are not common, but they do occur.  And they are very easy to fix once you understand how to use capitalization properly.

Consider the example in the cropped image above.  It shows an improper use of capitalization (indicated with the red underline).

What constitutes improper use?

Capitalization of nouns indicates a very specific instance as opposed to a more general case.  This guideline explains why titles and other names are often capitalized; they indicate a specific instance rather than a general reference.  Asking whether a reference connects to something specific or something in a more general sense can help writers determine whether or not to use capitalization.

Applying the guideline

By capitalizing reliability engineering, the author indicates a very specific instance, perhaps a special type of reliability engineering or a group or entity named Reliability Engineering.  But the context of the use of that term makes clear that the author really uses reliability engineering as a reference to a general subject area.

Fortunately, such errors are easy to fix.  And interestingly enough, the author actually used the term reliability  earlier in the abstract with the correct application of capitalization; the word appears in lowercase.  In my experience, these errors often appear consistently because the author thinks the guideline for proper usage is not what it really is.  Errors which do not appear consistently often indicates ignorance about the guideline for proper usage.  Either way, the fix is easy.  Learn the proper guideline, and then apply it consistently.

And is it just me, or did anyone else notice that Tip #6 is posted on the 6th day of the month?  There's some serendipity for you.  Seriously, I didn't plan it that way!
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    Howdy!  I'm Lance, Managing Editor of words by kurt.  I'm also an engineer and an educator.  With degrees in both engineering and English, I've been providing writing-related services since 1997, and I want to help my fellow engineers become better writers.  That's why in 2014 I started providing free writing tips via this blog.  Enjoy!

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